Yeah Write #18: Tank (#flashfiction)
Hanna Fraser/Photo: Ted Grambeau, Bancroft USA
For ninety-two years, she’d leave the tube tank and enter the twenty-six foot deep observation aquarium. She swam melancholy circles; show time simulated life; the people cheered. Saviors opened the outer gates, but the sea called the mermaid’s withered heart no longer.
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Oh… That is so sad. 😦
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The prompt this week was a tough one and I stared at a blank page for a long time. Maybe that’s why it ended up so sad.
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Oh! I know what you mean! think I wrote 5 different stories before finally settling on mine.
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It is indeed sad, but I love the details in this. Great job with the prompt!
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Thank you!
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A mermaid. The perfect subject for this prompt. Melancholy – but well written.
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Is 92 years a long time for a mermaid? 🙂 I liked, “melancholy circles”. Gave a perfect image.
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To me, the 92 years is the saddest part–to think that we humans have such an unquenched appetite for misery-as-entertainment. Great work.
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Thank you for taking the time to comment. That much misery is a disturbing thought…it was disturbing to write it!
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The saddest part to me is that she was only expected to live for all that time. Very nicely wrought microstory, Tara.
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Thank you for saying so. I had written a totally different story at first, before I started thinking about the idea of a captive mermaid.
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Poor thing has become institutionalized…like prisoners that can no longer live outside their prison. Very sad…
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The 92 years got me as well. Of course she would no longer feel the pull of the sea after so much time. Wow.
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