Yeah Write #71: Justice Comes Calling ( #amwriting #flashfiction )
His body collapsed to the sound of piano music playing from a stereo. Jennai’s crimson pot holder sported a smoking bullet hole. Who’d’ve thought a casserole guise would work?
Jennai propped a typed note on the man’s signature, lapel, single lily tinged with human blood: “Test the paintings.”
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I loved the bullet hole in the pot holder and the signature lapel lily, but I was a little confused by the note.
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I kind of slapped it together and didn’t have time to refine it. It was supposed to imply that he was a bad dude and the evidence was in the paintings.
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Love the story – saw your reply to the previous comment. Time constraints are awful, aren’t they? You have an extra comma between signature and lapel. Good work, despite being a rushed version!
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I really like the detective/mystery feel you evoked with the smoking bullet hole, the mysterious note, and the blood stained lily. It felt like it was a bigger story that was squeezed into the tight word count though. I’d love to see what an expanded version of this looks like on the Fic|Po weekly grid.
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I just loved the images here! I was very confused as well with the last line but totally understand that you were rushed. Been there! Well done for putting something together.
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Slightly hard to understand but good composition of all three prompts.
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I like that you didn’t try to squeeze too much in – you gave just enough to demonstrate the conflict.
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Very intriguing! That opening sentence is fantastic.
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