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Yeah Write #18: Tank (#flashfiction)

Hanna Fraser/Photo: Ted Grambeau, Bancroft USA

Hanna Fraser/Photo: Ted Grambeau, Bancroft USA

For ninety-two years, she’d leave the tube tank and enter the twenty-six foot deep observation aquarium.    She swam melancholy circles; show time simulated life; the people cheered.    Saviors opened the outer gates, but the sea called the mermaid’s withered heart no longer.

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13 comments on “Yeah Write #18: Tank (#flashfiction)

  1. d3athlily
    January 20, 2016

    Oh… That is so sad. 😦

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    • Laissez Faire
      January 20, 2016

      The prompt this week was a tough one and I stared at a blank page for a long time. Maybe that’s why it ended up so sad.

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      • d3athlily
        January 20, 2016

        Oh! I know what you mean! think I wrote 5 different stories before finally settling on mine.

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  2. theinnerzone
    January 20, 2016

    It is indeed sad, but I love the details in this. Great job with the prompt!

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  3. Liv
    January 20, 2016

    A mermaid. The perfect subject for this prompt. Melancholy – but well written.

    Like

  4. Amy Bee
    January 20, 2016

    Is 92 years a long time for a mermaid? 🙂 I liked, “melancholy circles”. Gave a perfect image.

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  5. Jennifer G. Knoblock
    January 21, 2016

    To me, the 92 years is the saddest part–to think that we humans have such an unquenched appetite for misery-as-entertainment. Great work.

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    • Laissez Faire
      January 21, 2016

      Thank you for taking the time to comment. That much misery is a disturbing thought…it was disturbing to write it!

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  6. innatejames
    January 21, 2016

    The saddest part to me is that she was only expected to live for all that time. Very nicely wrought microstory, Tara.

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    • Laissez Faire
      January 21, 2016

      Thank you for saying so. I had written a totally different story at first, before I started thinking about the idea of a captive mermaid.

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  7. Joe Ormerod
    January 21, 2016

    Poor thing has become institutionalized…like prisoners that can no longer live outside their prison. Very sad…

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  8. Christine
    January 21, 2016

    The 92 years got me as well. Of course she would no longer feel the pull of the sea after so much time. Wow.

    Liked by 1 person

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