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Writing on the Fly #11: Deceiver (#amwriting)

Note:  It is after the deadline for yeah write.   I didn’t make the grids so I’m posting the original “on the fly” 70-something word story I wrote for it (because I like it a lot).   It’s based on an idea  I had for a darker Little Mermaid tale with a more sinister villain.   I enjoy playing with character dialogue.  I tried to cut it to 42 words to make it fit.   I just can’t seem to make a story work when it goes that much beyond a word count.   I think I should probably stick to short stories.   Brevity is  not my forte.

“A shrewd bargain indeed.  The price stands.   I’ll have your tongue; it is quite a pretty one. Much I could do with it.” Rupahu licked his lips.

“I know you, Deceiver!” Ariel said.

“That is what they call me. So deserved.”

“If you interfere with my doings you forfeit your claims and my tongue will return to me — unsullied.”

“It is done! Now, clever one, that pretty tongue. Pity — you didn’t bargain for painless extraction.”


4 comments on “Writing on the Fly #11: Deceiver (#amwriting)

  1. d3athlily
    February 25, 2016

    Oh dear. That is horrifying. You are always so great at being graphic and making me squirm. Hahah

    Liked by 1 person

  2. Michael
    February 25, 2016

    Talk about a poor unfortunate soul. …

    Liked by 1 person

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