Writing on the Fly #11: Deceiver (#amwriting)

Note: It is after the deadline for yeah write. I didn’t make the grids so I’m posting the original “on the fly” 70-something word story I wrote for it (because I like it a lot). It’s based on an idea I had for a darker Little Mermaid tale with a more sinister villain. I enjoy playing with character dialogue. I tried to cut it to 42 words to make it fit. I just can’t seem to make a story work when it goes that much beyond a word count. I think I should probably stick to short stories. Brevity is not my forte.

“A shrewd bargain indeed. The price stands. I’ll have your tongue; it is quite a pretty one. Much I could do with it.” Rupahu licked his lips.

“I know you, Deceiver!” Ariel said.

“That is what they call me. So deserved.”

“If you interfere with my doings you forfeit your claims and my tongue will return to me — unsullied.”

“It is done! Now, clever one, that pretty tongue. Pity — you didn’t bargain for painless extraction.”

4 comments on “Writing on the Fly #11: Deceiver (#amwriting)”

d3athlily
February 25, 2016

Oh dear. That is horrifying. You are always so great at being graphic and making me squirm. Hahah

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- Laissez Faire
  February 25, 2016
  
  I think I read too many horror novels when I was a kid. 😉
  
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Michael
February 25, 2016

Talk about a poor unfortunate soul. …

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- Laissez Faire
  February 26, 2016
  
  Haha 😉
  
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