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Yeah Write #71: Justice Comes Calling ( #amwriting #flashfiction )

 

His body collapsed to the sound of piano music playing from a stereo. Jennai’s crimson pot holder sported a smoking bullet hole. Who’d’ve thought a casserole guise would work?

Jennai propped a typed note on the man’s signature, lapel, single lily tinged with human blood: “Test the paintings.”

 

 

 

 

 


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8 comments on “Yeah Write #71: Justice Comes Calling ( #amwriting #flashfiction )

  1. unfoldingfromthefog
    August 2, 2017

    I loved the bullet hole in the pot holder and the signature lapel lily, but I was a little confused by the note.

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    • Laissez Faire
      August 2, 2017

      I kind of slapped it together and didn’t have time to refine it. It was supposed to imply that he was a bad dude and the evidence was in the paintings.

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  2. Josh Flores
    August 3, 2017

    Love the story – saw your reply to the previous comment. Time constraints are awful, aren’t they? You have an extra comma between signature and lapel. Good work, despite being a rushed version!

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  3. Asha Rajan
    August 3, 2017

    I really like the detective/mystery feel you evoked with the smoking bullet hole, the mysterious note, and the blood stained lily. It felt like it was a bigger story that was squeezed into the tight word count though. I’d love to see what an expanded version of this looks like on the Fic|Po weekly grid.

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  4. d3athlily
    August 3, 2017

    I just loved the images here! I was very confused as well with the last line but totally understand that you were rushed. Been there! Well done for putting something together.

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  5. A.J. Bozdar
    August 3, 2017

    Slightly hard to understand but good composition of all three prompts.

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  6. Christine
    August 3, 2017

    I like that you didn’t try to squeeze too much in – you gave just enough to demonstrate the conflict.

    Like

  7. Laura
    August 3, 2017

    Very intriguing! That opening sentence is fantastic.

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